Hmm, this is a bit different than your usual fare, Jeffy-Pop.
The design is fairly solid, but at the same time very... mm... stagnant. The main figure then her close-up both centered kills any sense of motion and the design(s) in the top right feel like an afterthought. Further the background design does not give any importance to the foreground nor does it serve itself. Keep in mind I'm not trying to be an ass here, just that I've been designing cards and brochures for people for so long that I thought I would pass along the accursed "designer's eye" to you and ease my own pain. You're welcome.
As for suggestions- I know you are a BOTI fan, look at how the panels are broken up asymmetrically to add emphasis to the characters, give a sense of movement. Also, give a sense of composition of the background-- compliment the foreground. Should it look like cyberpunk or antiquated parchment or pop advertisement? The choice is yours, but right now it feels like a early 60s interior design that's been in the sun too long, faded out, and therefore, sucking up the energy the main character obviously has.
Still, these are just some suggestions. I truly hope your Mom enjoyed it, but I'm sure she did Jeff. You know you got amazing talent- I'm just trying to help ya, so again, please forgive me if I've annoyed you.
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I like this version better than the orignal. And I guess I can forgive you for making one of her eyes too big. It's not as noticeable in this piece.
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The design is fairly solid, but at the same time very... mm... stagnant. The main figure then her close-up both centered kills any sense of motion and the design(s) in the top right feel like an afterthought. Further the background design does not give any importance to the foreground nor does it serve itself. Keep in mind I'm not trying to be an ass here, just that I've been designing cards and brochures for people for so long that I thought I would pass along the accursed "designer's eye" to you and ease my own pain. You're welcome.
As for suggestions- I know you are a BOTI fan, look at how the panels are broken up asymmetrically to add emphasis to the characters, give a sense of movement. Also, give a sense of composition of the background-- compliment the foreground. Should it look like cyberpunk or antiquated parchment or pop advertisement? The choice is yours, but right now it feels like a early 60s interior design that's been in the sun too long, faded out, and therefore, sucking up the energy the main character obviously has.
Still, these are just some suggestions. I truly hope your Mom enjoyed it, but I'm sure she did Jeff. You know you got amazing talent- I'm just trying to help ya, so again, please forgive me if I've annoyed you.
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